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Shawn Emhe II's avatar

This was so good. Loved the way the different perspectives built up the imagery, and there was a subtext in the tonal shift of host that left me with genuine chills.

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Thanks Shawn. I'm glad that came across in the writing - I aimed for that! 💜

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Chris N.'s avatar

Fantastic! I love found footage. Mata, you did a great job capturing the reviews. I liked that Shayna tried so hard to get the ratings revised. Very authentic, I suspect I will be disappointed when looking at future reviews.

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Thanks Chris - I'd love to see someone do this for real on a rental site. Its would take a bunch of organisation, but it would be so cool!

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Skyla's avatar

Earned a new subscriber. This was such an interesting way to tell a story and I loved the ending. Totally spooky!!!

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Thanks, hope you enjoy the other tales 😁

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Jared Lambert's avatar

This was so fun!!

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Thank you! <3

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K.M. Bennett's avatar

Loved this! I am a sucker for unique story formats. I really liked how the comments were worded like actual comments, such as "v" instead of typing out "very". Ultimately I think you made a great choice by using those subtle techniques but avoiding typos. Well done. This is a fun one!

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Thanks K.M., you wouldn't believe how long I debated over whether it was more natural to write it 'v' or 'v.' (with the full stop for the abbreviation) 😅

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K.M. Bennett's avatar

It works so great!

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Jason Duck's avatar

Love a spooky nun story.

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Ghost nuns are a win every time!

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Jason Duck's avatar

A very cleaver short story- thanks for sharing.

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Saint-Lazare's avatar

Very cool!!!!

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Thanks!

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

What a great idea! Enjoyed this very much. :)

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Thanks Lyndsey!

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Jade Eby's avatar

This was delightful! I looooove when writers play and experiment with their creations. This one landed so well for me. Thanks for sharing!

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Aww, thanks Jade! Glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for commenting <3

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Hobbes's avatar

Fantastic stuff! A great way to tell a story. Love it! I have an idea for a novel told through various forms of writing, but one at a time eh? 🤣

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

No! All the things! All at the same time! 🤣🤣🔥🔥🔥🤣🤣

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Hobbes's avatar

This is the true horror 💀🤣

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Nick Winney's avatar

i liked the idea of this. it has the bones of more story for sure but very interesting technique. thanks for posting this!

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

It's a lot of fun - have a go sometime! 💪

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Nancy Waddell's avatar

Enjoyed this, what a great format!

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Mata Haggis-Burridge's avatar

Thanks Nancy! I love experimenting with the different forms that writing can take. I read "Found: An Anthology of Found Footage Horror Stories" last year and loved how we can play with the typical forms of writing to create fun and scary scenes.

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