I typically don't add much protagonist description in my micro-fiction, particularly when I'm writing in first person. It's hard to slip in while feeling natural, and often I'm writing more about the situation than the person. Quite often I leave the gender open too, letting the reader imagine whoever they want/dread in the scene.
Brilliant. Like a bite sized (sorry) Twilight Zone tale.
Thank you! I love Rod Serling's stories. It wasn't a conscious goal, but I see what you mean 😁💜
Felt very eerie in the best way! Looking forward to the next one!
Magnificent, especially for the limited word count.
Now, I fancy a second breakfast.
Yum yum yum!
Wow! Quite a story packed into those 400 words!!!
Thanks Jeanine!
I've been wondering how to write a non-Hallmark Mother's Day story. Thanks for a new perspective.
:D You're very welcome!
This story was strange and unique in the best way! Some haunting imagery!
Thank you!
YIKES!!!!
YEP! 😁
Delightful read to pass my lunch break. Lol. Nice work.
Perfect timing 😁
Well there’s a story that keeps you wondering. I really wanted a visual of the scrumptious little nugget.
Slathered in ketchup? You fiend!
I typically don't add much protagonist description in my micro-fiction, particularly when I'm writing in first person. It's hard to slip in while feeling natural, and often I'm writing more about the situation than the person. Quite often I leave the gender open too, letting the reader imagine whoever they want/dread in the scene.
I was thinking more …a hazel nutty chocolate sauce. Bravo! I loved it. Your technique really involves the reader.
Well, now I'm just hungry 😅
Wow.
Thanks Simon - the response to this one has been really lovely!
I love the way you flip the protective instincts into the urge to devour the baby. Gave me the chills!
Thanks Wendy, glad I could give you a shiver! :D
Wow, this poor guy has it rough. Hehe. Great story, Mata.
Thanks Parker. Yeah, definitely got dealt a bad hand (and leg, and torso...).
Loved this one!
Thanks Vince 💜
Outta pocket horror in the best damn way!!!
Aw, thanks Jared 💜
Thanks for the encouragement! The reaction to this one has been great - it certainly has got me thinking about adapting it to other media.
I don't know them - I'll check it out.
I post a new micro-fiction most weeks (sometimes other horror-adjacent things), so there are quite a few on my stack already.